中外诗文翻译（华章英韵） | 销夏 ‖第8期
2019-07-28 23:55:39 作者：白居易 诗 张智中 译 | 来源：中诗网 | 阅读： 次
炎炎夏日，何以消暑？各位读者，且随白居易一起“热散由心静，凉生为室空。”本期《华章英韵》特邀张智中教授执笔主译，张教授译文恰如原诗平易通俗，不拘泥于现在许多人追捧的韵译，如一缕清风给读者带来别样的惬意感受。
主持人
王如利（Wang Ruli）
丁立群（Ding Liqun）
Introduction
炎炎夏日，何以消暑？各位读者，且随白居易一起“热散由心静，凉生为室空。”本期《华章英韵》特邀张智中教授执笔主译，张教授译文恰如原诗平易通俗，不拘泥于现在许多人追捧的韵译，如一缕清风给读者带来别样的惬意感受。
How to pass the high summer? Dear Reader, just as Bai Juyi says, “A quiet mind dispels heat; an empty house enjoys the cool.” For this issue of Chinese Verse in English Rhyme,we feel greatly honored that Prof. Zhang Zhizhong has accepted our invitation to translate the poem. Prof. Zhang's translation, free from any restraint of end rhyme that many Chinese translators try to pursue, is popular and accessible, just like the original poem, and like a breeze it will bring you a different and pleasant feeling.
How to pass the high summer? Dear Reader, just as Bai Juyi says, “A quiet mind dispels heat; an empty house enjoys the cool.” For this issue of Chinese Verse in English Rhyme,we feel greatly honored that Prof. Zhang Zhizhong has accepted our invitation to translate the poem. Prof. Zhang's translation, free from any restraint of end rhyme that many Chinese translators try to pursue, is popular and accessible, just like the original poem, and like a breeze it will bring you a different and pleasant feeling.
书法：蔡铁勇
销夏
（唐）白居易
何以销烦暑，端居一院中。
眼前无长物，窗下有清风。
热散由心静，凉生为室空。
此时身自得，难更与人同。
Summering
Bai Juyi (Tang Dynasty)
Translated by Zhang Zhizhong
How to pass the high summer
when I am sitting in the courtyard
enclosed with high walls?
My eyes see nothing substantial
to produce shade; a faint breeze,
by the window, is fanning.
A quiet mind dispels heat;
an empty house enjoys the cool.
Now I feel at ease, enjoying
a carefree rest, which is a stranger
to the rest of the world.
The Translator's Comment
原诗8行，译诗11行，原诗押韵，译诗自由无韵。不拘诗行不顾尾韵，虽为国内译者所恶，却吻合西方译诗潮流。
标题“销夏”的英译，采取summer的动词形式：“过夏天，避暑”之意。因此，summering, 简洁而形象。例如：We summered in the mountains.（我们在山中避暑。）
汉诗一、二行，对应英文How to pass the high summer when I am sitting in the courtyard enclosed with high walls? 汉语2行，英译3行出之，enclosed with high walls（高墙四围），乃深层之译，增补而出，强调“烦暑”之困扰。其中，形容词high重复，但语义略微不同，带来译诗的玩味之处。
汉诗三、四行，对应My eyes see nothing substantial to produce shade; a faint breeze, by the window, is fanning. 同样，汉语2行，英译3行。“无长物”在汉语中语义宽泛，相应的英文nothing substantial to produce shade（没有什么可以遮阴的实物）走向了具体。“清风”，英译a faint breeze ... is fanning, 如此搭配，带来新鲜的语感，特别是fanning（像扇子一样吹风），正描写了清风无计可销夏的微弱之风。另外，从音韵的角度而言，see, substantial 押头韵，shade, faint押元音韵，faint, fanning与breeze, by分别形成跨行头韵。如此音韵技法，在当代英诗中，远比尾韵更为常见。
汉诗五、六行，对应A quiet mind dispels heat; an empty house enjoys the cool. 大体直译，采用陌生化搭配，取得良好效果。这里的cool为名词，前置定冠词，往往表示“凉爽，凉气”之意。例如：enjoy the cool of the evening.（纳晚凉。）
汉诗七、八行，Now I feel at ease, enjoying a carefree rest, which is a stranger to the rest of the world. 再次，汉语2行，英译3行出之。“身自得”之英译，用了at ease和enjoying a carefree rest两个短语，乃充分翻译。英语词典上例句：Yaks are enjoying a carefree rest in the water.（牦牛在水中悠然自得。）随后的a stranger to the rest of the world（世人对此陌生），可能对国内读者的理解带来挑战，但对于熟悉英语-er类词语妙用的读者来说，却会带来惊喜之感。另外，这里的两个rest，词形相同，含义却异，也带来一定的语言审美效果。
总之，汉诗英译的终极读者，当为英美人士，那么，翻译策略便处处为其考虑。译诗像英诗，甚至像一流的英美诗人写出来的英语诗歌，才是译诗的真正成功。
标题“销夏”的英译，采取summer的动词形式：“过夏天，避暑”之意。因此，summering, 简洁而形象。例如：We summered in the mountains.（我们在山中避暑。）
汉诗一、二行，对应英文How to pass the high summer when I am sitting in the courtyard enclosed with high walls? 汉语2行，英译3行出之，enclosed with high walls（高墙四围），乃深层之译，增补而出，强调“烦暑”之困扰。其中，形容词high重复，但语义略微不同，带来译诗的玩味之处。
汉诗三、四行，对应My eyes see nothing substantial to produce shade; a faint breeze, by the window, is fanning. 同样，汉语2行，英译3行。“无长物”在汉语中语义宽泛，相应的英文nothing substantial to produce shade（没有什么可以遮阴的实物）走向了具体。“清风”，英译a faint breeze ... is fanning, 如此搭配，带来新鲜的语感，特别是fanning（像扇子一样吹风），正描写了清风无计可销夏的微弱之风。另外，从音韵的角度而言，see, substantial 押头韵，shade, faint押元音韵，faint, fanning与breeze, by分别形成跨行头韵。如此音韵技法，在当代英诗中，远比尾韵更为常见。
汉诗五、六行，对应A quiet mind dispels heat; an empty house enjoys the cool. 大体直译，采用陌生化搭配，取得良好效果。这里的cool为名词，前置定冠词，往往表示“凉爽，凉气”之意。例如：enjoy the cool of the evening.（纳晚凉。）
汉诗七、八行，Now I feel at ease, enjoying a carefree rest, which is a stranger to the rest of the world. 再次，汉语2行，英译3行出之。“身自得”之英译，用了at ease和enjoying a carefree rest两个短语，乃充分翻译。英语词典上例句：Yaks are enjoying a carefree rest in the water.（牦牛在水中悠然自得。）随后的a stranger to the rest of the world（世人对此陌生），可能对国内读者的理解带来挑战，但对于熟悉英语-er类词语妙用的读者来说，却会带来惊喜之感。另外，这里的两个rest，词形相同，含义却异，也带来一定的语言审美效果。
总之，汉诗英译的终极读者，当为英美人士，那么，翻译策略便处处为其考虑。译诗像英诗，甚至像一流的英美诗人写出来的英语诗歌，才是译诗的真正成功。
There are 8 lines in the Chinese poem and 11 lines in the English version; the Chinese poem is with end rhyme and the English version is without end rhyme, free without any restraint. Translation without considering the number of lines and the end rhyme caters to Western readers instead of Chinese translators.
In translating the title of “销夏”, the verb of summer has been chosen, which means to spend the summer or to prevent sunstroke. Therefore, “summering”, as the title, is vivid and concise. For example: “We summered in the mountains.”
Lines 1 and 2 correspond the English version: “How to pass the high summer when I am sitting in the courtyard enclosed with high walls?” Chinese 2 lines into English 3 lines. “Enclosed with high walls” is added information, so as to highlight the heat of summer. And the word “high” is repeated with slight variance in meaning, which adds flavor to the translated poem.
The English version of lines 3 and 4: “My eyes see nothing substantial to produce shade; a faint breeze, by the window, is fanning.” Again, Chinese 2 lines into English 3 lines. “无长物” has a broad meaning, and its English counterpart “nothing substantial to produce shade” is much more concrete. The Chinese word “清风” has been translated into “a faint breeze ... is fanning”: such collocation brings a sense of novelty, particularly, “fanning” felicitously describes the weak wind which fails to subvert the height of summer. In addition, concerning rhyme, there is alliteration in “see” and “substantial”, assonance in “shade” and “faint”, as well as cross-line alliteration in “faint” and “fanning”, “breeze” and “by”. This kind of rhyming skill is more often seen in contemporary English poetry, compared with the end rhyme.
Lines 5 and 6: “A quiet mind dispels heat; an empty house enjoys the cool.” Literal translation is used here, and defamiliarization is effective here. When used as a noun, “cool” is often prefixed with a definite article to signify something cool or cold. For example: enjoy the cool of the evening.
Lines 7 and 8: “Now I feel at ease, enjoying a carefree rest, which is a stranger to the rest of the world.” Again, Chinese 2 lines into English 3 lines. In translating “身自得”, two English phrases have been used: “at ease” and “enjoying a carefree rest”, so as to bring out the rich meaning in the original. An example from the English dictionary: “Yaks are enjoying a carefree rest in the water.” The phrasing of “a stranger to the rest of the world” may defy understanding by the Chinese readers, yet the occasional use of such a word ending with -er usually brings a pleasant surprise to the English readers. Besides, the repetition of “rest” with different meanings also subjects the readers to an aesthetic experience in wording.
In short, the ultimate readers of C-E poetry translation are those from the English-speaking world, and in choosing a translation strategy, consideration is made for them. A successful translated poem should be, or at least aim to be a sterling English poem, even like a literary piece produced by a first-rate English poet.
In translating the title of “销夏”, the verb of summer has been chosen, which means to spend the summer or to prevent sunstroke. Therefore, “summering”, as the title, is vivid and concise. For example: “We summered in the mountains.”
Lines 1 and 2 correspond the English version: “How to pass the high summer when I am sitting in the courtyard enclosed with high walls?” Chinese 2 lines into English 3 lines. “Enclosed with high walls” is added information, so as to highlight the heat of summer. And the word “high” is repeated with slight variance in meaning, which adds flavor to the translated poem.
The English version of lines 3 and 4: “My eyes see nothing substantial to produce shade; a faint breeze, by the window, is fanning.” Again, Chinese 2 lines into English 3 lines. “无长物” has a broad meaning, and its English counterpart “nothing substantial to produce shade” is much more concrete. The Chinese word “清风” has been translated into “a faint breeze ... is fanning”: such collocation brings a sense of novelty, particularly, “fanning” felicitously describes the weak wind which fails to subvert the height of summer. In addition, concerning rhyme, there is alliteration in “see” and “substantial”, assonance in “shade” and “faint”, as well as cross-line alliteration in “faint” and “fanning”, “breeze” and “by”. This kind of rhyming skill is more often seen in contemporary English poetry, compared with the end rhyme.
Lines 5 and 6: “A quiet mind dispels heat; an empty house enjoys the cool.” Literal translation is used here, and defamiliarization is effective here. When used as a noun, “cool” is often prefixed with a definite article to signify something cool or cold. For example: enjoy the cool of the evening.
Lines 7 and 8: “Now I feel at ease, enjoying a carefree rest, which is a stranger to the rest of the world.” Again, Chinese 2 lines into English 3 lines. In translating “身自得”, two English phrases have been used: “at ease” and “enjoying a carefree rest”, so as to bring out the rich meaning in the original. An example from the English dictionary: “Yaks are enjoying a carefree rest in the water.” The phrasing of “a stranger to the rest of the world” may defy understanding by the Chinese readers, yet the occasional use of such a word ending with -er usually brings a pleasant surprise to the English readers. Besides, the repetition of “rest” with different meanings also subjects the readers to an aesthetic experience in wording.
In short, the ultimate readers of C-E poetry translation are those from the English-speaking world, and in choosing a translation strategy, consideration is made for them. A successful translated poem should be, or at least aim to be a sterling English poem, even like a literary piece produced by a first-rate English poet.
The Translator
张智中，南开大学典籍翻译及译论研究方向博士，河南大学诗歌翻译博士后。现为天津师范大学翻译研究所所长、外国语学院教授。兼任《世界诗人》季刊客座总编，国际诗歌翻译研究中心副主席。出版编、译、著80余部，在外语类核心和其它重要刊物上发表学术论文100余篇，另有诗歌创作发表。2018年，专著《汉诗英译美学研究》获天津市第十五届社会科学优秀成果三等奖。主持并完成国家社科基金后期资助项目《汉诗英译美学研究》和天津市哲学社会科学规划课题重点项目《汉诗英译风格流派研究》，目前主研国家社科基金项目《汉语诗歌在英语世界的译介研究》。汉诗英译多走向国外，获国际著名诗人和翻译家的广泛好评。译诗观：但为传神，不拘其形，散文笔法，诗意内容；将汉诗英译提高到英诗的高度。
Zhang Zhizhong obtained a doctor's degree in translation studies from Nankai University, and he has done his postdoctoral study in aesthetics of poetry translation at Henan University. He is now director of Translation Studies Center of Tianjin Normal University, and professor of Foreign Languages College of Tianjin Normal University. Meanwhile, he is guest editor of The World Poets Quarterly and vice chairman of International Poetry Translation and Research Centre. Until now, he has published over 80 books and 100 academic paper. Besides, he has published his own poems. In 2018,his monograph An Aesthetic Study of C-E Translation Poetry won the third prize at the 15th Excellent Achievements in Social Sciences of Tianjin. He has finished An Aesthetic Study of English Translation of Chinese Poetry, a project funded by the National Social Science Foundation of China, and A Study of the Styles and Schools of C-E Poetry Translation, a key project funded by Tianjin Social Science Foundation. Now he is undertaking A Study of the Translation of Chinese Poetry in the English World, a project funded by the National Social Science Foundation of China. His English translation of Chinese poetry is widely acclaimed throughout the world, and is favorably reviewed by international poets and translators. His view on poetry translation: spirit over form, prose enjambment to rewrite Chinese poetry into sterling English poetry.
Zhang Zhizhong obtained a doctor's degree in translation studies from Nankai University, and he has done his postdoctoral study in aesthetics of poetry translation at Henan University. He is now director of Translation Studies Center of Tianjin Normal University, and professor of Foreign Languages College of Tianjin Normal University. Meanwhile, he is guest editor of The World Poets Quarterly and vice chairman of International Poetry Translation and Research Centre. Until now, he has published over 80 books and 100 academic paper. Besides, he has published his own poems. In 2018,his monograph An Aesthetic Study of C-E Translation Poetry won the third prize at the 15th Excellent Achievements in Social Sciences of Tianjin. He has finished An Aesthetic Study of English Translation of Chinese Poetry, a project funded by the National Social Science Foundation of China, and A Study of the Styles and Schools of C-E Poetry Translation, a key project funded by Tianjin Social Science Foundation. Now he is undertaking A Study of the Translation of Chinese Poetry in the English World, a project funded by the National Social Science Foundation of China. His English translation of Chinese poetry is widely acclaimed throughout the world, and is favorably reviewed by international poets and translators. His view on poetry translation: spirit over form, prose enjambment to rewrite Chinese poetry into sterling English poetry.
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主 编：王磊、释圣静
名誉副主编：王永纯、德肋撒.李
副主编：黄金珠、蔡铁勇
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名誉主编：周占林
主 编：王磊、释圣静
名誉副主编：王永纯、德肋撒.李
副主编：黄金珠、蔡铁勇
编 委：王如利、丁立群、晚枫、王琳、史潘荣、罗晓佳、赵直
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